I like how you made rugby seem so proper with the words "elegant" and "gentlemen" yet threw in the "carnal desires" part which contrasted with it very nicely.
Hey Ben, Yeah definitely powerful contrasting images. It kind of leaves the reader wondering if more ideas could be manipulated through the imagery, for a longer poem? Expansion would be neat, but the concise style you chose works nicely.
It was short, sweet, and to the point. I normally like stuff like that, but I felt like it might have been too short..
I think rugby is a great sport, to watch, and I think that your two lines could be an excellent opening to a long, thought out description of the beauty and the violence that rugby has to offer.
Ben, How you made rugby look more like a refined sport was awesome! I liked the length, almost like a definition. It was very catching and painted a beautiful picture in my mind. The poem is a great opening and probably could have lead to a lot more. I enjoyed the simplicity of it though. Becca
I am impressed that in two lines you created effective imagery and made your point. You really understood the 'simplicity' concept spoken about in class :)
I like how you made rugby seem so proper with the words "elegant" and "gentlemen" yet threw in the "carnal desires" part which contrasted with it very nicely.
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Hey Ben,
ReplyDeleteYeah definitely powerful contrasting images. It kind of leaves the reader wondering if more ideas could be manipulated through the imagery, for a longer poem? Expansion would be neat, but the concise style you chose works nicely.
Melanie Hyche
Ben
ReplyDeleteIt was short, sweet, and to the point. I normally like stuff like that, but I felt like it might have been too short..
I think rugby is a great sport, to watch, and I think that your two lines could be an excellent opening to a long, thought out description of the beauty and the violence that rugby has to offer.
cole
Ben,
ReplyDeleteHow you made rugby look more like a refined sport was awesome! I liked the length, almost like a definition. It was very catching and painted a beautiful picture in my mind. The poem is a great opening and probably could have lead to a lot more. I enjoyed the simplicity of it though.
Becca
This is really cool, bunch of my friends played rugby and they are definitely violent on the field.
ReplyDeleteI am impressed that in two lines you created effective imagery and made your point. You really understood the 'simplicity' concept spoken about in class :)
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